Your Universe

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The galaxies glistening
within your eyes
beckoned me to your brilliance
like a beacon leading me home.
Your light entranced me
and placed my heart into suspension.
I felt an absence of gravity
in your presence
but somehow,
I fell anyway.

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31 thoughts on “Your Universe

  1. Gravitation cannot be held responsible for people falling in love. How on earth can you explain in terms of chemistry and physics so important a biological phenomenon as first love? Put your hand on a stove for a minute and it seems like an hour. Sit with that special girl for an hour and it seems like a minute. That’s relativity.
    Albert Einstein

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    1. I realize that. I was just using it as a metaphor/play on words. Like you feel weightless, high, happy, etc. around the person and you fall in love with them. I didn’t mean it literally and it has nothing to do with chemistry or science. I was just using an analogy.

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    2. Why would you attack him on his creative expression by acting as if a metaphorical description of his feelings is inappropriate or some how not correct. Here is the definition of metaphore just in case you dont know it.

      A metaphor is a figure of speech that identifies something as being the same as some unrelated thing for rhetorical effect, thus highlighting the similarities between the two.

      Clearly not holding gravity responsible.lol. relativity in its self is a somewhat metaphorical process.

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  2. This is the only post of yours ive read so far an i did enjoy it. Which is a kind of rarity for me when reading poetry. Even though i write poetry. I seldomly stumble upon a piece i actually enjoy. An its not bc i have high standards or anything like that. I just usually cant feel alot of peoples poetry. I guess because usually it either sounds forced or like there wasnt much thought put into the composition. But this had a natural flow to it. An it also sounded like it was sincerely expressed. I amgonna follow your blog though.

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    1. Haha thank you! And I completely understand what you’re saying- I’m kind of the same way. I don’t claim to be the best, or very good for that matter, but I write what I feel and go with it. I think a lot of bloggers write for the attention, likes, and followers and it’s evident to me who means what they’re saying. Honesty is easy to see through poetry.

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  3. It would be awesome though if when you have the oppertunity maybe checking out my wordpress. An if you enjoy whats up there maybe following me. I dont really know how to personalize my site an all that kind of stuff so that it attracts a larger audience. An also i dont really post often bc its simply easier writing on paper than it is to write on a phone. So my site is easy to overlook. But i really would like to have more followers. I put alot into my writing. So naturally i want people to read my work an enjoy it. So if you have the time id be quite greatful.

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    1. Sure! I’ll check it out 🙂
      And I’m on my phone the majority of the time too. I created/personalized my site on the computer though. It needs updated but I’m afraid to try to change it on my phone. Lol

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      1. I just dont have the interest to spend all the needed time to even learn how to do all that kinda stuff with my site. I am not very good with technology. It tends to get under my skin. The only reason i have this is bc i got tired of having stacks of paper everywhere. So the plan was to transfer all my work over to this blog. So that way not only would someone be able to read it.”my writing on paper is chaotic”. But when ever i die i want my stuff to be accessible to my family and friends. Maybe one of them will put em in a published book or something who knows. I have more interest in my stuff being recognized after i die. I dont want to dedicate all this effort into getting it out. If i gain from it then when i write it will become for a diffrent reason. An it will affect the nature of my work. I dont want to corrupt the truth in my work. Jd sallinger i learned was like this to. He quit publishing his stuff an stored all his work in a vault. An wasnt to be touched or published till 3 years after his death.

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        1. I’m terrible with it myself. Haha, I want to update a few things on here, but I’m afraid of losing the progress I’ve made with it. I hope to get something published, but I don’t necessarily want to make money or anything from it. I just want to know that I accomplished it and that someone, somewhere is truly interested in what I have to say. And maybe, just maybe, I’ll impact someone’s life. The thought of not publishing until you die is very noble. Especially when you know that if it is published during your life that it may become dishonest. Honesty in writing is the most important quality, in my opinion.

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          1. I understand the reasoning behind wanting it to be published. I often want the same thing for the same reason. I often want to share my stuff because i know there is wisdom in it. But i just dont have the resources to ahieving it. An with All the time i would have to putin to learning an achieving this would demand and dominate most of my time. An inside i know that this isnt the path i want for my overall direction. But helping others in the way that you were mentioning is also very importalsoto me. An i know deepdown my writing isnt my path to achieving that. But it is involved. Me writing helps refine the thoughts and understandings i have. Which refines my ability to convey on a personal level so that it resonates. My strength is in conversation and thought.communicators should write writer should regularly communicate

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