Slipping in the puddles
from yesterday’s rain,
I seem to lose my balance
as if it were something
I already had.
I reach for something–
a hand, perhaps,
just anything that can–
that will–
remain in my grasp.
I beg for solid ground
in which I can firmly stand.
A place to rest my feet,
that won’t continue to move
in circles– in spirals–
spinning me downward,
dizzying my mind,
nauseating my heart,
and confusing my soul.
These puddles surrounding me–
these fragments
of once considered thoughts
gather along the surface
of the course I often tread.
I need guided
away from this constant trek
and help to discover
a different path.
This is just perfect
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Thank you π
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My hand is outreached
And I’ve got a plan
Let me walk with you,
Down a untraveled path
Not through the sand
Of an overturned hourglass
Or the dust and dirt
Of an unwanted past
On concrete I stand
Waiting to take your hand
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that’s cute!
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π Love it! Great response piece!
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Nice evoloution of a theme, great flow
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Thank you! π
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Outstanding flow this was magnificent
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Thank you! Glad you liked it! π
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Amazing…
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Thank you!
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You are welcome… Please do make some time to visit my blog… ππ
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Great Post
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Thank you!
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We all need a guide. But sometimes we think our path is spiraled, but alas, it is the process of being woven into something meaningful. The beauty of a mat or basket is seen when the process is complete.
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You’re right. You never know what life is planning π
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same state of mind!
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Wonderful. The lines “these fragments / of once considered thoughts” is gorgeous, and to compare to them to puddles upon which you slip is refreshing perspective. Like others, I feel I have been in this landscape all to often, with the sense of near hopelessness, knowing there has to be a better path. Great work.
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I’m so glad you enjoyed it and that it resonated with you. I feel like I’m on this path all the time, where I feel like I can’t catch my balance and I’m just slipping and sliding around, hoping that I don’t fall. Maybe there’s a different path, maybe there’s something waiting to help you through it. All you can do is keep trudging along and hope for the best. π
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I really enjoyed the rhythm and flow of this poem. As always, the message was fantastic and original. Great Job!
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Thank you very much! I’m glad you enjoyed it π
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Beautiful poem! π
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I loved it.. It’s so relatable due to the fact that all of us have been in that particular position at least once..! Beautiful π
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Very beautiful.
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Amazing! I was absorbed into the persona’s dilemma immediately. Beautiful use of imagery! Keep up the good work! π
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