My Gnawed Core

I haven’t learned
why my soul has yet
to bare its pearly bone
outwards; instead, it turns
toward me and grins,
exposing the jagged
white stones which threaten
to gnaw at my core.
They gnash and grind
against themselves
as the dull sounds
grate inside of me.


A short poem that I havent decided if I want to add to, or leave as-is. Let me know what you think!

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37 thoughts on “My Gnawed Core

  1. I would be inclined to say, it feels complete to me, but of course, the final decision is yours!
    “exposing the jagged
    white stones which threaten
    to gnaw at my core”
    I know how that feels… you captured it perfectly. well done.

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  2. ‘I haven’t learned
    why my soul

    has yet
    to bare

    its pearly
    bone outwards;’

    You can always play with a poem’s structure…love the poem though. just a thought.

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    1. That would slow it down too much for my taste. Structure, line and stanza breaks, whether the poem in centered or right aligned, if I break into another stanza in the middle of a sentence, etc. is something I’m extremely, extremely picky about, haha. I made it into a single stanza and medium sized lines to group it as a continous thought, where breaths are a bit more natural rather than making the reader pause after every other word.

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  3. I love this. On reading this through once or twice, I liked it as it was; loved it actually. However, and gosh, I’m hoping that everyone won’t hate me but I’m thick skinned and I live far away from everyone. With that in mind, I was going to say that I would finish it off with another sentence or two. That’s not taking anything away from what you’ve already penned. I think I’ll leave now.

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    1. Haha, no one will hate you! Adding a few more lines is kind of what I thought too, actually. But I had trouble thinking of what to write and wasn’t sure whether to just leave it a bit more up to interpretation, or what to do with it.

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