I saw it perched
outside your bedroom window–
just sitting there, searing
its beaded, black eyes
through the pane.
Its slate wings slowy waved
back
and forth
as it crowed over its view.
The utterance of that wicked
sound drew another to its side
and that pair of feathered omens
gave hint that something
as dark as they
was on its way.
Their calls to the others
echoed through the bitter air,
freezing my lungs
and numbing my body–
I couldn’t breathe.
I couldn’t move.
Standing next door
on my porch,
glaring across the yard,
I could do nothing
but watch
as they waited,
patiently,
for the murder to arrive.
LIKE button doesn´t load so as always great writing and….LIKE´D
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I hate when that happens… but thank you very much!
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Eerily beautiful!
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Thank you!!
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You set up the scene beautifully in this. It reads like a short story and I truly appreciate that.
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Thanks!! I’m glad the story is evident, I wasn’t sure how others would read it.
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A beautifully captured moment.
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Thank you!
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It is so Edgar Allen Poe. Fantastic.
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Thank you! He’s my favorite, I take that as a huge compliment 🙂
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Love the way you painted the foreboding scene with poetic words. Perfect image.
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Thank you so much! Glad you liked it! Honestly, I’m glad it makes sense. I wasn’t sure if anyone would understand it haha.
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The beauty of writing is that each person is able to find their own understanding in the piece. It is well constructed and done.
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I’m bordering round a noose and that piece just hit the spot
Pure wordidge, friggin genius write
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🙂 thank you!!
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Oooo! Brilliant – what a finish 🙂 Thanks for sharing
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Thank you very much!
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the pleasure is mine Allison 🙂
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I love the tone of this, so ominous and it keeps the reader’s anticipation up till the end which is also a great finish! Really good!
I would love your input on some of my poems! Give it a look and please comment, I’d love to have your opinions! 🙂
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Thank you very much, I’m glad you enjoyed it!
And I’ll definitely check it out 🙂
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Wonderful! Would love to have you as a guest poet sometime! Cheers J
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Thank you! What is a guest poet on your blog?
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Have a wander through my blog and you will see the various guest poets inbetween my work to get the idea – https://eyewillnotcry.wordpress.com/ – then email me a suitable poem to eyewillnotcry@hotmail.co.uk and I will do the rest! Hope to hear from you – Cheers J
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Okay, sounds good! Thanks!
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Love it! 🙂
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Thank you!
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Beautiful set of words
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🏃🏽–Eeeeeeee!😳
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Fantastic! One of the first song poems I wrote in 2010 was about the life of a crow. The last line was “the murder grows to cheat the moon”.
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This is brilliant! Love the link to ‘The Omen’… Thank you for an enjoyable read. Jx
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I absolutely hate these birds because they freak the hell out of me. You couldn’t be more on point.
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Beautiful
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Thank you!
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Stunning.
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